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Heartbreak

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I woke up and died again.
I think we all feel like this sometimes. :hug:
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I went through several different versions of this, but I think this one is the best. It's a six word story.

Some questions
1. Does this have the feeling of a whole story, as if you know it from this one line?
2. What thoughts/feelings were provoked, if any?
3. How do you feel this could be improved?
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3wyl's avatar
I feel that there could be ellipses after "up", but that's just me, I think...

It's quite simple in terms of the diction and the phrasing, but it really is quite profound with what it suggests. I like how the title gives us more of a context to what you are talking about there, but... yeah, really interesting. :nod: